Copyright © AlbinoPoetry, 2008
He smashes stones like there’s no tomorrow,
Like all the days in his life,
Pointless; in a good way.
And every time he sings that song,
Oh, one down, one down, one down,
He’s really counting away the minutes
Swinging with all his might
Oh, one down, one down, smash
Counting away every day left
Every fluttering eyelid is impervious
To his existence; in a good way
Oh, one down, one down, one down
And with every stone he smashes
He’s only that much closer to dying
Smiling, oblivious, maybe not
Oh, one down, one down, smash
He never gives a reason, never an answer
But in his mind, he knows the truth.


I am stronger than a stone.
I will live forever.

Smash.
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Language: English
Category:
Poetry > Human Nature
Date Added:
10th of March 2008, at 1:59 pm
Word Count: 127
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Comment by stellacat
11th of March 2008, at 12:36 am
(English)
stellacat
Interesting. I like it. Especially the repetition of 'one down'
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Under the summer rain I burnt away.
Comment by AlbinoPoetry
16th of March 2008, at 4:21 am
(English)
AlbinoPoetry
Thanks :)
To feel a feeling worth feeling, is to feel no feeling at all
Comment by Nisachan666
3rd of May 2008, at 12:34 pm
(English)
Nisachan666
very nice. i especially like the lines

"Every fluttering eyelid is impervious
To his existence; in a good way"
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If you are reading this then this warning is for you. Every word you read of this is useless fine print is another second off your life. Don't you have other things to do? Is your life so empty that you honestly can't think of a better way to spend these moments? Or are you so impressed with authority that you give respect and credence to all who claim it? Do you read everything you're supposed to read? Do you think everything you're supposed to think? Buy what you're told you should want? Get out of your apartment. Meet a member of the opposite sex. Stop the excessive shopping and masturbation. Quit your job. Start a fight. Prove you're alive. If you don't claim your humanity you will become a statistic. You have been warned... - Tyler Durden, Fight Club
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